Gracie Von Bitterstiltz

[GRACIE VON BITTERSTILTZ]

[atrb=cellSpacing,20,true][atrb=cellpadding,0px,true][atrb=border,0,true] [atrb=style, width:500px; bTable] [atrb=background,http://i.imgur.com/uNZDJ.png,btable][STYLE=background-color: transparent; font-size: 30px; text-align: center; font-family: wire one; font-weight: lighter; line-height: 75%; border-bottom: 3px #c2c2c2 solid; border-top: 3px #c2c2c2 solid; float: right; width: 480px; height: 30px; margin-right: 10px; margin-top: 0px; padding-top: 5px; overflow: auto; color: #444444; letter-spacing: 2px;]CHARACTER FILE: Gracie Von Bitterstiltz[/style] [STYLE=background-color: e1e1e1; font-size: 10px; text-align: justify; float: right; width: 300px; height: 300px; margin-right: 10px; margin-top: 20px; overflow: auto; color: #353535; padding: 5px;]APPEARANCE BIOGRAPHY MISCELLANEOUS [/style] [STYLE=background-color: e1e1e1; border-left: 5px #c2c2c2 solid; text-align: center; font-family: wire one; font-size: 20px; float: left; width: 150px; height: 25px; padding-top: 5px; margin-left: 10px; margin-top: 0px; margin-bottom: 10px; overflow: auto; color: #353535;] Murr-Crab [/style] [STYLE=background-color: e1e1e1; border-left: 5px #c2c2c2 solid; text-align: center; font-family: wire one; font-size: 20px; float: left; width: 150px; height: 25px; padding-top: 5px; margin-left: 10px; margin-top: 0px; margin-bottom: 10px; overflow: auto; color: #353535;] Female [/style] [STYLE=background-color: e1e1e1; border-left: 5px #c2c2c2 solid; text-align: center; font-family: wire one; font-size: 20px; float: left; width: 150px; height: 25px; padding-top: 5px; margin-left: 10px; margin-top: 0px; margin-bottom: 10px; overflow: auto; color: #353535;] Twenty-six [/style] [STYLE=background-color: e1e1e1; border-left: 5px #c2c2c2 solid; text-align: center; font-family: wire one; font-size: 20px; float: left; width: 150px; height: 25px; padding-top: 5px; margin-left: 10px; margin-top: 0px; margin-bottom: 10px; overflow: auto; color: #353535;] Khajiit [/style] [STYLE=background-color: e1e1e1; border-left: 5px #c2c2c2 solid; text-align: center; font-family: wire one; font-size: 20px; float: left; width: 150px; height: 25px; padding-top: 5px; margin-left: 10px; margin-top: 0px; margin-bottom: 10px; overflow: auto; color: #353535;] Heterosexual [/style] [STYLE=background-color: e1e1e1; border-left: 5px #c2c2c2 solid; text-align: center; font-family: wire one; font-size: 20px; float: left; width: 150px; height: 25px; padding-top: 5px; margin-left: 10px; margin-top: 0px; margin-bottom: 10px; overflow: auto; color: #353535;] Dark Brotherhood [/style] [STYLE=background-color: e1e1e1; border-left: 5px #c2c2c2 solid; text-align: center; font-family: wire one; font-size: 20px; float: left; width: 150px; height: 25px; padding-top: 5px; margin-left: 10px; margin-top: 0px; margin-bottom: 10px; overflow: auto; color: #353535;] IMAGE [/style] [STYLE=background-color: e1e1e1; border-left: 5px #c2c2c2 solid; text-align: center; font-family: wire one; font-size: 20px; float: left; width: 150px; height: 25px; padding-top: 5px; margin-left: 10px; margin-top: 0px; margin-bottom: 10px; overflow: auto; color: #353535;] Murr-Crab [/style]

[Coralie]

Hey there MurrCrab! Gracie seems like a really interesting character so far, but there
are a few things I need to address before I can properly accept her as a part of CotS.

• Could you please remove the

  [/ quote] tags in your post?
  

• You've been going as MurrCrab in the cbox, so unless you intend to change it to Krystal, it minimizes confusion if you write down MurrCrab in the alias box too
  
• You say that Gracie is a year younger than Layla, but then Layla is looking forward to having an older sister? It isn't a big deal and I'm assuming it was just an honest mistake, but it'd be nice if you could clear that up..
  
• Gracie hears about the Dark Brotherhood, and her first thought is to kill someone to join them... Why's that? There are plenty of other ways to make something of herself, most of them far more legal. So what motivated her all of a sudden? Killing her 'brother' and smiling about it afterwards with no remorse, even if they didn't get along, sort of gives me the impression that she may have always had an urge for blood and death, and if that's the case, you'll need to write it in, or at least drop subtle hints about it, earlier on in her profile. If that's not it, please expand a bit more on her thoughts/why she did it. You don't need to change her, I just think she needs a little bit more development in this area.

And that's it, really. I'll be more than happy to give her the approval stamp after all
of this has been fixed. If you have any questions in the mean time, feel free to ask!

[GRACIE VON BITTERSTILTZ]

There I fixed all the problems you addressed. Thank you so much for reviewing my profile <3

[Coralie]

No problem, thanks for cooperating! Go check out the claims and feel free to start posting!